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For Week #9 (Bow) FIC: Jerusalem


TITLE: Jerusalem
AUTHORS: starry_diadem  
RATING: Adult
WORD COUNT: 1942
PAIRING: John/Rodney
SUMMARY: Scars, and reflections. Oh, and koala bears.



esteefee   tempted me to the darkside, I'm afraid. Please blame her for everything.  Well, except for the fact that this is unbeta'd and written hurriedly to meet the deadline, so all mistakes and nonsenses are my own.

I'm sorry that LJ won't allow me to post it here.  Nearly an hour of Error 503 messages have driven me to distraction.  So I've posted to my own website and linked from here and maybe....





Comments welcome.

Comments

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esteefee
Jul. 30th, 2011 06:44 pm (UTC)
omg omg yay! and yes, I think exceptions are fine in this case. we should have made an announcement.

off to go read!
esteefee
Jul. 30th, 2011 07:10 pm (UTC)
oh! oh so lovely, the care and devoted kisses and contemplation and I especially loved the imagery of John himself strung like a bow in his service of what he feels is his duty. so, so lovely! your words are just gorgeous.

this is so true: Rodney knows how to read the book when most people aren't allowed past the title page

and I was so happy to see a shout out to Griffin. :)
starry_diadem
Jul. 30th, 2011 09:42 pm (UTC)
Well, you only have yourself to blame. This week's prompt was very tempting. I'm only sorry that LJ's problems prevented me from posting properly. It's very frustrating if you want to post more than a sentence or two.

I know that John is often laid back to the nth degree, but under that is a quite unswerving set of values and sense of honour: the bow imagery tries to reflect that. I'm glad that you liked this. It was a bit rushed and unpolished, but I thoroughly enjoyed writing it.
esteefee
Jul. 30th, 2011 10:04 pm (UTC)
\o/ well, that works because I thoroughly enjoyed reading it, and plan to savor it more slowly again. :))

and yes, he is clearly so much more than the leaner-against-objects he portrays in casual settings, and I love whenever the situation triggers his protective intensity.
londonsabre
Jul. 30th, 2011 07:13 pm (UTC)
Gorgeous writing!
starry_diadem
Jul. 30th, 2011 09:42 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm glad that you enjoyed this.
danceswithgary
Jul. 30th, 2011 08:11 pm (UTC)
Beautiful piece!
starry_diadem
Jul. 30th, 2011 09:43 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.
saffronhouse
Jul. 30th, 2011 08:16 pm (UTC)
Oh, so very lovely--thank you!
starry_diadem
Jul. 30th, 2011 09:43 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm pleased that you liked it.
spikespet7
Jul. 30th, 2011 08:21 pm (UTC)
Wonderfully done......sigh!


Kimber
starry_diadem
Jul. 30th, 2011 09:44 pm (UTC)
I'm delighted that you enjoyed it. Thank you!
tygtig
Jul. 30th, 2011 10:10 pm (UTC)
Absolutely lovely, and a new and tender take on Badass!John who's one of my favourites.

(And definitely "Legoli", IMHO. Goth Legoli.)
starry_diadem
Jul. 31st, 2011 07:22 am (UTC)
Thank you! I love a John who's unmistakably military and capable.

I usually think Legoli as well, but then I get distracted by the realisation that the true plural of octopus is octopodes. So should it be Legolodes?
beadattitude
Jul. 31st, 2011 12:06 am (UTC)
Oh, I loved it! Thank you so much!
starry_diadem
Jul. 31st, 2011 07:18 am (UTC)
Thank you! It was a great prompt to write to and I'm glad you liked the story.
hoktauri
Jul. 31st, 2011 02:08 am (UTC)
This... is mesmerizing.

This line: Pegasus has a way of stretching him until he's pulled out, attenuated, a human bow with the string pulled taut and the arrow trembling on the nock, until he's strung between the conflicting stars like Odin on the tree. He tries often and fails often.

...left me breathless.

And this one: John's been still a fraction too long and Rodney knows how to read the book when most people aren't allowed past the title page.

Is spot-on brilliance.

LOVEDITLOVEDITLOVEDIT.
starry_diadem
Jul. 31st, 2011 07:32 am (UTC)
Wow, thank you! I'm delighted - and rather humbled - that this has worked so well for you. It was a joy of a little story to write, and to have feedback of this calibre is very satisfying (although probably bad for me!)

Thanks again.

scarlettandblue
Jul. 31st, 2011 04:50 pm (UTC)
Another gorgeous story from this prompt, images that were so beautiful. John's innner voice was just perfect, I loved how his thoughts wandered off topic then back on track very well written. And John's sentiment, that he should put his body between Rodney and any harm, that is so beautifully him. Thank you for writing this and sharing it with us.
starry_diadem
Aug. 1st, 2011 12:49 pm (UTC)
Thank you. I often think that John is harder to catch than Rodney, and I'm really pleased that you think I managed it here. It was a lovely prompt!
syble4
Aug. 1st, 2011 09:18 pm (UTC)
Yeah, SGA fic! It seem very like John to obsess on scares, especially Rodney's scars. This makes me want to see how he deals with the scar he gave Rodney by shooting him in Phantoms.

This was beautiful.
starry_diadem
Aug. 2nd, 2011 07:15 am (UTC)
Hi! SKYPE. Turn on, now and again!

Gosh yes, I should have thought of the Phantoms one. Glad you liked this - it was fun to write

rissabby
Aug. 1st, 2011 10:26 pm (UTC)
Here via a rec from sgamadison.

Beautiful. I liked the underlying idea that John is somehow this articulate, lyrically thoughtful person in him mind (and about Rodney) as opposed to his on-screen laconic character. And I also especially liked, Rodney knows how to read the book when most people aren't allowed past the title page.

And, I was very warmed by the feeling that Rodney was being well, and thoroughly, and thoughtfully loved. Perfect.
starry_diadem
Aug. 2nd, 2011 07:17 am (UTC)
I think that John just can't *say* it, like there's disconnect between heart and mouth - remember that wonderfully painful conversation with Teyla in Sateda?

Glad that you liked it.
tangotabby
Aug. 2nd, 2011 12:37 am (UTC)
So, so, so lovely--it made my heart hurt (in a good way, though!)
starry_diadem
Aug. 2nd, 2011 07:17 am (UTC)
Thank you! I'm delighted that you hurt a little bit - also in a good way, of course!
springwoof
Aug. 6th, 2011 09:37 am (UTC)
poetry and beauty! a lovely gem of a story, thank you!
starry_diadem
Aug. 6th, 2011 02:18 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm delighted that you enjoyed it.
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