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Author:selenic76
Title: Signs (also on AO3)
Characters: Dr. Biro
Rating: PG-13
Word count: 376
Warnings: dead unknown character
Disclaimer: Don't own or profit from them

Summary: She worked in silence, reading the signs as they were uncovered.

Author's notes: This is not my happiest story. But I was told, that sometimes you have to let the story take a path that I might disagree with. This time, to challenge myself, I let that happen. Thank you to zoemathemata and spikespet7, and the whole Squee Weekend team, for their encouragement and inspiration.



Signs


She worked in silence, reading the signs as they were uncovered.

Carefully removing the clothing, scissors struggling to cut the fabric of his uniform that had been made stiff by dried mud and blood, she worked her way around the pockets. One of them would hold a memory of home, something familiar to carry with you as you ventured into the unknown. She mentally catalogued every visible bruise, scrape and wound, every mark marring the pale skin, for future scrutiny.

The last to go were the dog tags around his neck, as cold as the rest of him had become. The man looked so young—to her, most of them did. The crinkles around his eyes told he had been a person who had laughed a lot. She knew he had a name, but it was information she only passed on to her report, and didn’t linger on. Other things were more important; her job was not to remember, but to observe, analyze, and interpret.

She took the first set of pictures, and gathered samples of things she wanted to examine more thoroughly later on in the lab. Then she wiped him clean, cautiously, reverently. Dark, dry stains melted and trickled down his skin in small rivulets that slowly turned clear as she worked to reveal the details hidden beneath. Old faded scars, symbols that the medical history translated into stories of courage and survival, were just as meaningful to her as the three livid streaks with strange perforated patterns at his side that were most likely to be the thing that had ended the final chapter of the young man’s life. Another series of photographs, the last documentation of his form as it was.

After turning on the recorder, she picked up the scalpel, but then stopped.

“Forgive me,” she whispered quietly, the sound of it barely reaching the ears that no longer could hear.

The first incision was always the hardest, but years had taken away the hesitation of her youth. Methodically, with practiced precision, she took him apart, knowing it might bring her one step closer to the truth, and saving the others. And if her voice at times wavered while she dictated each step of her process, her hands never did.

 

~~~ End ~~~

 

Comments

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zoemathemata
Oct. 6th, 2013 12:48 am (UTC)
YAYYY you posted it! I'm so happy for you! And proud of you! It's wonderful - understated and lovely!

:D
selenic76
Oct. 6th, 2013 07:58 am (UTC)
Thank you so much for the lovely words! And for reading that first draft, and saying you liked it. That helped me cross the threshold, and keep working with this. And for the beta too ^_^ *hugs* I'm proud of myself too, even if I still feel like crying at the end of the fic.
titan5
Oct. 6th, 2013 01:38 am (UTC)
What a huge impact for such a few words. I love how respectful she was, how caring - even though her "patient" was already gone. And that last sentence was so perfect! Awesome!!
selenic76
Oct. 6th, 2013 08:02 am (UTC)
That you read this and left such a wonderful comment, means so much to me! This was the first time I wrote something like this, preferring to do happier stories, and it was important to hear I did ok.

Thank you so much for commenting, I'm am so glad to hear you liked this enough to call it awesome :)
spikespet7
Oct. 6th, 2013 01:38 am (UTC)
I knew you could do it.....and I loved you picked Biro for this......

Kimber
selenic76
Oct. 6th, 2013 08:04 am (UTC)
Thank you for having such faith in me, and urging me on to even try something like this *hugs*

And I have a fondness for Biro :) This was my third story that featured her! Having chosen her, the story was born around the character, the prompt suited her well.
melodysparks
Oct. 6th, 2013 08:00 am (UTC)
That was superb
selenic76
Oct. 6th, 2013 08:05 am (UTC)
Aw, thank you so much! It was an effort for me to write something this sad, so it means a lot to hear you liked it that much *hugs*
goddess47
Oct. 6th, 2013 07:10 pm (UTC)
Oh, so very nicely done!

Great use of the prompt!
selenic76
Oct. 6th, 2013 07:52 pm (UTC)
Thank you! ^_^ I really missed my computer during SW, but I'm glad I managed to get this done after I got home. Lucky I had my sweet new notebook from wyndewalker to write my ideas down in ^_^

Happy to hear you liked, thanks for the comment!
melagan
Oct. 7th, 2013 12:24 am (UTC)
This is heart-shatteringly wonderful.

selenic76
Oct. 7th, 2013 05:59 am (UTC)
And to think this wouldn't have come to existence had I not taken the trip overseas :) Thank you so much for the comment, and everything else *hugs*
livejournal
Oct. 7th, 2013 01:57 am (UTC)
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squidgiepdx
Oct. 7th, 2013 04:35 pm (UTC)
Signs fic
That was hauntingly beautiful! Well done!
selenic76
Oct. 8th, 2013 04:52 am (UTC)
Re: Signs fic
Thank you, means a lot to hear that! I felt so sad about this that I didn't want to write it at first, so I'm glad you found beauty in it too.
tangotabby
Oct. 10th, 2013 03:26 pm (UTC)
This is heartbreaking, but in an utterly lovely way! The fact that she is still respectful and not completely hardened to the process after all this time is truly touching. What a great glimpse into her character!!!
selenic76
Oct. 11th, 2013 07:53 am (UTC)
Thank you so much for such a nice comment! ^_^ *hugs*

Afterwards I worried about her not being in character, because she's such a bubbly person otherwise, but I think there is this side to her as well. (Being somehow jolly or having a weird sense of humour seems to be typical to pathologists on tv shows...)

I've grown quite fond of Biro, and it was interesting as well as challenging to show this side of her.
tangotabby
Oct. 11th, 2013 04:57 pm (UTC)
I don't think out of character. Even though she's bubbly around people, she can still have a serious side when it comes to serious work like this. It gives her character much more depth to be able to be respectful and *not* bubbly in this situation!

In my experience, having a weird sense of humor is not unusual among medical personnel in real life--it's often a way of coping with the stress. Jolly, though, not so much!
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