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Week 49: Attention

Title: Devil's in the Details
Author: altyronsmaker
Wordcount: 600
Rating: pg
Pairing(s): John/Rodney
Prompt(s): Week 49: Attention
Notes: It's unbeta'd. Spell checked, sure, but it's just a free association kind of thing, because I'm BLOCKED so bad. Concrit welcome.
Summary: Knowing someone is an investment, an active study of the material presented.


Knowing someone – bone deep knowledge of someone – doesn’t come from the maturation of a growing acquaintance. It’s an investment, an active study of the material presented. No big picture attitude. Rodney’s never been a ‘big picture’ kind of guy. He’s a scientist, an observer and collector of data. He makes hypotheses, gathers the minutiae and puts it all together. The devil, and the secret, Rodney knows, is always in the details. Even when learning people.

The quirk of an eyebrow. A slow blink of self-consciousness as he ducks his head. The shaggy lock of hair that falls over his eye when he hasn’t been to the barber in too many weeks.

It’s the quirk of a trigger finger in that instant just before negotiations go sour. The silent breath of relief when Teyla smoothes over the hitches.

It’s in the click of teeth when his jaw clenches. Another soldier down; one more letter to write; a family whose lives he’ll destroy.

It’s the slouch that Rodney knows is doing irreversible damage to an otherwise perfectly fine back.

It’s the grin. That damned, devil-may-care grin of utter perverse pleasure at getting one over on whoever thinks they’re in command of him.

It’s the wink.

The pat on the shoulder.

The ghost of fingers down his spine as Rodney steps into the event horizon.

The teasing, the banter, the exaggerated drawl of his name when Rodney’s been at work too long.

The aroma of freshly brewed secret stash at 4 in the morning when the answers just won’t come and simulations keep showing failure.
It’s the “You’ll figure it out, McKay,” said with a half-smile and wink.

The slight curve of his mouth that no one else would even notice, but since Rodney’s been paying attention and knows the planes of his face, he sees it and knows that softer expression is just for himself.

“You’re going to get caught one of these days, Colonel.”

“Don’t care.”

And there’s the grin and its occasional companion the shrug.

Rodney sighs and turns back to his computer. “Of course not.” He wants to dismiss the conversation, but he keeps an ear out.

“But I can tell you do.”

Rodney doesn’t have to turn around again; he can hear the smirk in John’s words.

“You’re obvious.”

“You like it.”

And so what if he did?

The sim chimes out another failure, and Rodney closes the screen in disgust and turns to face John. He points at him. “You don’t have to sound so utterly smug about it.”

“True, but would I be me if I didn’t?”

That makes Rodney smile. Because he knows John’s got a point.

It’s been years and years, and Rodney’s studied every nuance and quirk about his friend and team leader. His…John.

“No,” he says, “No, I guess you wouldn’t.”

John winks at him. “You done?”

And there’s that soft expression Rodney knows is his.

“Yeah,” he says.

“Dinner?”

Rodney stares at him in silence for a minute, until John looks up at him in askance. “McKay?”

“I’m not hungry.”

The smile that slides over John’s face is the one nobody else has ever seen. It’s rare and bright and just this side of dirty, and Rodney gets hot all over.

There are details that Rodney knows, that Rodney has studied. Details that tell the truth of who and what Colonel John Sheppard is – in his quarters, in his bed, in his relationship. Details that only Rodney knows. Details Rodney’s not sharing.

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esteefee
May. 2nd, 2012 02:44 am (UTC)
eee! oh, what a terrific, vivid picture you paint with all these details, not only of John but of Rodney's wonderful, squishy heart. <3 <3 <3 ::melts::
altyronsmaker
May. 3rd, 2012 11:12 pm (UTC)
OH Good! I've been so blocked lately - uninspired, and hating everything I did put down on paper. So yeah. I'm relieved that this doesn't totally suck the way everything else I've put down has.

Whew!

Thanks for reading and the little hearts. ♥
blackchaps
May. 2nd, 2012 03:28 am (UTC)
This is good stuff. *shakes Rodney for details*
altyronsmaker
May. 3rd, 2012 11:13 pm (UTC)
I know. I want the deets too, but he's just being a pain in the ass! the little f*cker. Glad you liked this, and thanks for reading. ♥
tavabean
May. 2nd, 2012 04:00 am (UTC)
Yummm!
altyronsmaker
May. 3rd, 2012 11:14 pm (UTC)
hehehe. Rodney is kinda delish, right? Or. Wait. You probably meant John? or maybe both? Either way, it's all good! Thanks for reading and for the comment. ;) Yum indeed.
squidgiepdx
May. 2nd, 2012 04:09 am (UTC)
Awwww
I gotta agree with esteefee - What an awesome picture you paint here of Rodney and John. Or rather, Rodney's John, and John's Rodney. So many beautiful things splayed out, in so few words!
altyronsmaker
May. 3rd, 2012 11:19 pm (UTC)
Re: Awwww
thanks so much! :D I've been having a major suckfest with the writing lately - nothing has been coming out right or decent or anything. I've hated it all. But the 'Attention' prompt popped the bones of this into my head, and then they demanded to be fleshed out.

so glad it worked, and wasn't icky like the other stuff. *hugs*
tarlanx
May. 2nd, 2012 08:35 am (UTC)
Very nice :)
altyronsmaker
May. 3rd, 2012 11:20 pm (UTC)
thank you. :)
scarlettandblue
May. 2nd, 2012 08:39 am (UTC)
Very lovely,
especially the way it unfolds, the way all those little details add up. So very John and so very Rodney.
altyronsmaker
May. 3rd, 2012 11:25 pm (UTC)
Oh, thank you. Rodney's attention to those details is pretty darn close. :D Glad you liked it.
melagan
May. 2nd, 2012 12:26 pm (UTC)
I like this very, very much.
altyronsmaker
May. 3rd, 2012 11:25 pm (UTC)
yay! Thanks, I'm glad you did! :D
talula728
May. 2nd, 2012 01:31 pm (UTC)
I love this!
altyronsmaker
May. 3rd, 2012 11:26 pm (UTC)
Yay! That makes me pleased. :) Thanks for reading and commenting.
antares04a
May. 2nd, 2012 03:45 pm (UTC)
Very lovely! With all the details only a really attentive lover can know.
altyronsmaker
May. 3rd, 2012 11:26 pm (UTC)
Right. I miss having details to notice...:(

Thanks for reading and I'm glad you liked it. :D
danceswithgary
May. 2nd, 2012 04:56 pm (UTC)
Very nice! :-D
altyronsmaker
May. 3rd, 2012 11:27 pm (UTC)
Thanks! :)
saphirablue
May. 2nd, 2012 08:18 pm (UTC)
This is so very beautiful! =)

Thank you!
altyronsmaker
May. 3rd, 2012 11:28 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I was worried, b/c I hadn't put words down in a creative way in a while. So glad this worked that way I meant it to, and I'm also glad you liked it.
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altyronsmaker
May. 3rd, 2012 11:29 pm (UTC)
Thank you.

And 'thank goodness!' I was afraid it was too...I don't know...odd, but that's how it was playing out in my head. I'm glad it worked as is.
lazy_8s
May. 3rd, 2012 01:55 am (UTC)

So, take that, chieftan's daughters and Ancient priestesses! Only Dr. Mckay REALLY knows John, body and soul. Loved it! :)
altyronsmaker
May. 3rd, 2012 11:30 pm (UTC)
Absolutely! Those Chieftan's daughters and priestesses have NO chance against the sheer focus that is Rodney's scientific, cataloging brain. HE was bound to win John over from the attention alone.

Thanks for reading and commenting. I'm glad you liked it.
popkin16
May. 3rd, 2012 02:01 am (UTC)
I love this ♥ Especially the last paragraph :D
altyronsmaker
May. 3rd, 2012 11:32 pm (UTC)
Thank you. :) glad you liked it. :D
perfica
May. 3rd, 2012 10:07 am (UTC)
Lovely! If this is your free association then I can't wait to see your next fic.
altyronsmaker
May. 3rd, 2012 11:35 pm (UTC)
LOL. Thank you. I don't know when that'll be, because the muse, she is broken. :D
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